Not bad, in large part, but...
And you knew that was coming.
Here are a few items in your Gospel presentation I would take issue with:
Could you show me that in Scripture?
Truly it is Adam's sin and the Fall which is the reason for your sin, but, your sin is your sin, and Adam's sin is his sin.
In other words, you are judged guilty because of the sin you have committed, not for the sin Adam committed.
You were born condemned because you were born separated from God. And it is only Christ dying in your place, not Adam's, which accounts for your sin being atoned and you being reconciled to God.
Paul told us though that all died in Adam due to Him failing the test and falling, but all saved now alive in Christ, who as second adam kept the Law and did what our first Head failed to do!
Everyone could be justified by keeping the Law...if they could do it.
So better to make that clear.
Paul disagrees, as he stated that NO flesh shall be able to get justified by keeping the law
Galatians 3:21
King James Version (KJV)
21 Is the law then against the promises of God? God forbid: for if there had been a law given which could have given life, verily righteousness should have been by the law.
Actually, the Son of God "came to earth," and took up residence in a body that had never been to Heaven.
God the Son became Jesus at theconception
Whereas I could argue that Jesus died for your sin, rather than "He took it in full" upon Himself. I do not take a view that "spiritually my sin, or yours, was placed on Christ. The demand of the penalty of sin is death, and He, completely innocent of sin, died in our place, a lamb without spot or wrinkle.
Penal substitutionary Death of the heart of the Gospel though
God bless.